We were learning how to write a good paragraph.
Imaginary Planet Information ReportUse your planning from earlier in the week to sort your ideas into paragraphs. You may add the heading in a blue box after discussing with the teacher.
Overview (introduction)
Keywords
Made of candy
Candy-land
Bigger than Jupiter
In our solar system
Topic sentence
Candy-land is in our solar system.
Elaboration (supporting ideas / information)
Candyland is bigger than jupiter
Candy-land is all made of candy.
This planet looks and taste different than Earth. It also has unique animals and its problems are different than those we experience on Earth.
Appearance
Keywords
tree trunk licorice grow money
Rivers rainbow coloured
Chocolate fish
Rivers melted chocolate
Topic sentence
Candy-land looks very weird.
Elaboration (supporting ideas / information)
The tree trunks are made of lirorice and the tops are made of candy floss and they make money.
The rivers are rainbow coloured and they are melted chocolate there are chocolate fish that swim in the river\ sideways.
Taste
Keywords
Eat house holes rain (fruit burst) come in house
Rain fruit burst 10 days a month
never leave
Topic sentence
Candy-land taste very interesting.
Candy-land taste very interesting.
Elaboration (supporting ideas / information)
Candy-land is strange because it rains fruit bust 10 days a month.
The aliens eat holes in the roof of other people house and so the rain comes in.
People never leave because they love the taste so it is always growing in the number of people.
Living Creatures
Keywords
Nice
Light blue
One eye blink every 10 min
8 legs
4 arms
No tail
Topic sentence
The aliens on Candy-land aren’t like any other alien.
Elaboration (supporting ideas / information)
These alien have one massive eye on their forehead which blinks every 10 minutes.
They have 8 legs like an octopus and 4 arms but they have no tail.
There body is light blue but they are very nice.
problems
People never leave because they love the taste so it is always growing in the number of people.
Living Creatures
Keywords
Nice
Light blue
One eye blink every 10 min
8 legs
4 arms
No tail
Topic sentence
The aliens on Candy-land aren’t like any other alien.
Elaboration (supporting ideas / information)
These alien have one massive eye on their forehead which blinks every 10 minutes.
They have 8 legs like an octopus and 4 arms but they have no tail.
There body is light blue but they are very nice.
problems
Keywords
Sugar rush have to limit it
Eat everything until nothing left
Hales tic tac and rain fruit burst
Topic sentence
There are lots of problems on candy-land.
Sugar rush have to limit it
Eat everything until nothing left
Hales tic tac and rain fruit burst
Topic sentence
There are lots of problems on candy-land.
Elaboration (supporting ideas / information)
One problem on candy-land is that when it rains
Fruit burst come down even worst when it hales tic tacs come down.
If people keep on eating everything there will be nothing left.
Because of the people eating everything they get sugar rush so they will have to limit it.
One problem on candy-land is that when it rains
Fruit burst come down even worst when it hales tic tacs come down.
If people keep on eating everything there will be nothing left.
Because of the people eating everything they get sugar rush so they will have to limit it.
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