Wednesday, July 25, 2018

descriptive writing

WALT: write descriptive writing.

I popped off the beam when my legs split apart upside down in
the air the crowd go silent to wait for the result if I succeed.
I watch the bar as I lineup where my feet are supposed to land.
My feet touch the ground of the beam. The crowd goes wild.
I feel my heart race as I leap into the next move.  


1 comment:

  1. Hi Jess, My name is Grace I love this piece of writing that you have done. I remember when we did this in our class we sometimes still do it. I was wondering why half of the writing is a different colour to the other writing. Maybe next time you could you could just check it makes sense.

    From Grace

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